Writing Exercise – “Eddie’s Hell”

Written By: Jess - Apr• 28•14

This scene came about from the WonHundred Words Wednesday bloggings. I had the idea to combine three of my characters from the prompts and put them together. This was delightful to write. I hope you have as much fun reading it as I had writing it.

You might want to read the two flash fictions that the characters come from, here: “The Devil’s Name was Fred” & “Would You Like Fries With That?


“Eddie’s Hell”

The door opened and then slammed shut as Fred hustled in a young man wearing a fast food chain uniform peppered with bullet holes.

“My administrative assistant said you were being difficult,” Fred said, dumping a load of paperwork that had large red x’s next to where his signature needed to be.  He ignored the pile and peered over his glasses at the scowling face. “Why, Edward?”

Eddie went to open his mouth but Fred cut him off.  “Let me guess. Hmm? You don’t think you belong in hell. There’s been a mistake. A mix-up perhaps?” Fred chuckled.

The young man snorted and propped his feet up on Fred’s desk. Slack jawed and wide-eyed, Fred shoved them off and pulled out a handkerchief to buff the polished wood.

“It’s Eddie, not Edward. And no. I definitely belong in hell.” Eddie said. “I just want to know if I have to see –”

“This is, like, so wrong!” A voice wailed.

Both Eddie and Fred cringed in unison.

Fred’s intercom buzzed and he pressed the button to receive the call. “Yes, Mr. Wormwood?”

“A friend of Eddie’s is here. She’d like to speak with you as well,” the disembodied voice said, sounding uncomfortable.

Eddie waved his hands back and forth, fervently mouthing ‘no’ over and over again.

There was the sound of clanging and Wormwood whimpering before a high pitched voice grated their ears.

“I said I’M, LIKE, NOT SUPPOSED TO BE HERE. I should be an angel! People like me don’t go to hell!” The distraught woman yelled into the confiscated intercom. There was sniffing. “I’m too pretty.”

Fred took off his glasses, rubbed the bridge of his nose, straightened and smiled at the device. He looked brave to Eddie, except for his shaking finger as he leaned in close and pressed the button to talk.

“Trust me dear, there are plenty of pretty people here in hell. Why don’t you come back here and I’ll explain it all to you and your dear friend Mr. Edward.”

“That psycho is not my friend,” Eddie said. He glared at the door as he reached for Fred’s letter opener on the desk.

Fred smacked Eddie’s hand away and shook a finger at him. “None of that or I’ll stick you on Hell’s Janitorial Crew.”

“She shot me!” Eddie said. “At least let me poke her with it.”

With a crinkled nose and scrunched up mouth, Fred shook his head and said, “Absolutely not.  If you want to act like a savage I can arrange for you to keep them company. Better yet, I can arrange for you to clean up after them.” Fred’s voice took on a sterner tone. It reminded Eddie of a principal from an 80’s movie.  “Trust me young man. You don’t want that.”

Eddie was about to quip back when the door burst inward and a blonde woman teetered into the room. Her massacre was smudged, lipstick smeared across her upper lip, and her hair looked like a rats nest. Or like someone had pulled it. She also had bullet holes in her torso, although considerably more than Eddie.

“Well if it isn’t Calorie Counting Barbie,” Eddie drawled as he leaned back in his chair.

“You!” the blonde screamed and lunged for Eddie, but Fred caught her around the waist and pulled her backward. She clawed at the fast food employee, her chipped nails aiming for his face. Eddie toppled out of his chair and backed up against the wall.

“See! Told you. A complete psycho,” Eddie panted. He eyed the letter opener again.

“This is how you ended up dead,” Fred said to Eddie. He turned his attention back to the struggling woman in his arms. “Miss. Miss, please take a seat. Eddie will behave himself.”

Eddie snorted.

Fred again looked over the rim of his glasses at Eddie, making the young man squirm. The blonde stopped struggling and took a few deep breaths. Fred waited a few more moments before releasing his captive.

“State your name,” Fred said as he stepped around her and stood between Hell’s two latest additions.

“Penny,” the woman said, sniffing as she smoothed her skirt.

“He didn’t ask you about your total earnings of being able to form a single coherent thought,” Eddie said with a false smile. “He asked for your name.”

Penny’s eyes blazed and she hurtled forward again.

Fred pushed her back. “Edward!” he said, his voice hard. “I warned you.”

Eddie shrugged.

Fred wondered if there was something worse than the Janitorial Crew.

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Photo Credit: By artur84

(Live from LDStoryMakers) A Post from Brandon Sanderson’s Master Class

Written By: Jess - Apr• 26•14

Hi everyone. This is a quick (but long) post. During Brandon Sanderson’s master class at LDStorymakers he asked what character dossier people used. “The EPIGUIDE.COM Character Chart for Fiction Writers”  by Kira Lerner and Toni Walker is the one I like to fill out to better understand my major characters. I’ve tweaked and reorganized it for me and I’m sharing my version below.

 

BTW, I feel the urge to warn you that if you plan on printing this out with 12 point font and double spaces, plan on it being a minimum of 13 pages.

 

My version of Kira Lerner and Toni Walker’s Character Dossier:

 


 

NAME

Character’s Full Name:

Name Origin:

Nickname, if any and origin:

Do they like the nickname:

 

BASICS

            DOB & Age:

            Place of Birth:

            Ethnic Background:

            Religion:

            Degree of religious practice (orthodox, casual, lapsed):

 

APPEARANCE

            Hair (color, natural/unnatural, length, style & texture):

            Eyes (shape, color, glasses/contacts/any):

            Face Shape (round, oval, chubby, thin, long, square, heart-shaped, etc.):

            Skin tone (pale, ivory, tan, olive, ruddy, brown, etc.):

            Height & Body Type (thin, athletic, overweight, curvy, muscular, etc.):

            Hearing (average, deaf, better than average, hearing aid?):

            Any prominent features, freckles/moles/scars/tattoos or other distinguishing marks:

            Do they looking like anyone in their family or a famous person? Which parent do they take after:

            General Health:

            Any current health problems or chronic conditions:

CLOTHING/JEWELRY/GROOMING

            How do they dress (expensive/inexpensive/cheap/average):

            Style (trendy/haute couture/conservative/eclectic/business/sexy/gaudy/casual/sloppy):

            Why do they dress in the above manner:

            Any special jewelry:

            Grooming (fastidious/very neat/average/clean buy scruffy/dirty/unkempt)? Why?

 

SPEECH & LANGUAGE/COMMUNICATION

            Pace of speech (fast, average, slow?):

            Voice tone (shrill, high, average, deep, squeaky, hoarse, harsh, authoritative, cultured, etc.):

            Accent/dialect, if any:

            Any favorite/habitual words/phrases? Curse words?

            Describe general vocabulary or speech pattern (e.g. educated, precise, pretentious, average, uneducated, vulgar…):

            Mannerisms/Demeanor (Cool/confident, Volatile, Nervous/Shy, Aggressive, Friendly, Remote, Other):

            Typical Posture (Stiff, Stands straight but not stiffly, Average, Slumped/defeated, Relaxed, etc.):

            Gestures (Rarely, Controlled, When excited, most of the time, wildly/oddly, other):

            Common/Habitual Gestures (nail-biting, hair patting, drumming fingers, clenched fists, hands in pockets, etc.):

 

EVERYDAY BEHAVIOR / HABITS:

            Finances: (prudent/cautious, some debt, lives paycheck to paycheck, deep in debt, criminal activity, etc.):

            Personal Habits: Smoking, Drinking, Drugs, Gambling, etc.? Are any of these addictions?

            Morning Routine: Who else is sleeping in the same bed? What time do they wake up? Are they cheerful in the morning?  What do they do during breakfast-read, watch tv, feed kids, etc.:

            Afternoon/Workday: How do they get there? Are they good at this job? What, if anything, would they rather be doing? How long and hard is the work day? If the job isn’t outside the home, what does a typical afternoon consist of?:

            Dinner: Do they eat at home or go out a lot? What is their favorite restaurant(s)? Who cooks at home? Do they eat alone? 

            Evening: What do they do on a typical evening? Where? With whom? How much do they enjoy it? What is the ideal evening for them?

            Sleep Habits:  Fall asleep easily, or an insomniac? Any recurring dreams? Sleep soundly, or toss & turn?

            Any special talents? Skills?

            What is s/he particularly unskilled at?

            Any hobbies (sports, games, arts, collecting, etc.)?

 

HOME, CAR & PETS

            HOME

            Current address:

            Do they rent or own?

            Brief description of home (apartment/house/etc.):

            Do they live with anyone?

            Describe the area in which s/he lives (city, town, rural, other):

            Is this his/her ideal home and location? If not, what would s/he prefer?

            What is the Home décor like?

            CAR

            Do they drive? Own a car? (Make, model, color, age, etc.):

            PETS

            Pets?  (If so, what kind/how many/names?)

            If so, how important are they? How well are they treated?

 

JOB, SEXUALITY, FAMILY

            JOB

            Current occupation (include length of time, location, job title):

            Job satisfaction (happy, discontent, ambivalent, ambitious…):

            Income:

            Future Career Plans?

SEXUALITY & FAMILY

            Sexuality (e.g. straight, gay, bisexual, asexual, uncertain…):

            Marital status:

            If married or currently romantically involved, with whom, and for how long? 

            List any significant previous romantic partners:

            For current spouse/partner, what does the character call him/her (pet names, nicknames, etc.?):

            How did they meet?

            Any children (include names, ages, other parent if different from any current partner):

            Describe his/her relationship with children (if any):

 

FAMILY OF ORIGIN:

Mother’s Name (include maiden name if known/applicable):

            Current status:  __ living __ deceased   (If alive, enter age: )

            Mother’s occupation, if any:

            Describe the mother’s relationship with character:

Father’s name:

            Current status:  __ living __ deceased   (If alive, enter age: )

            Father’s occupation, if any:

            Describe the father’s relationship with character:

            Any step-parents, foster parents, or birth parents (if not same as above):

            Are they adopted, do they know? If not, why?

Sibling(s) (include age and birth order relative to main character):

            Relationship(s) with character:

            Nieces/Nephews:

            In-Laws, if any:

            Other than the above, who else in the story is part of their extended family (e.g. cousins, etc.)?

 

THE PAST:

            Home town (if different from current home):

            Was his/her childhood happy? Troubled? Dull?  Does the character remember it accurately?

            Earliest memory:

            Happiest memory:

            Saddest memory:

            How much school did s/he attend, if any? Did/does s/he like school? Why or why not?:

            Most significant childhood event:

            Other significant childhood events:

            Significant past jobs:

                        Police record (explain any convictions, sentence served, where/when):

            First crush/romantic love?

            What was his/her first sexual experience?  Is it a positive or negative memory?

            Major illnesses, accidents or traumas? How are they still affected, if at all?

 

RELATIONSHIPS WITH OTHERS:

            Who is their best friend?

            Who are their other close friends?

            How in general does the character relate to friends?

            … to strangers?

            … to spouse/Lover?

            … to past spouses/lovers?

            … to own children, if any?

            … to other family members?

            … to the same sex?

            … to the opposite sex?

            … to children in general?

            … to others who are more successful?

            … to others who are less successful?

            … to boss (if any)?

            … to underlings at work?

            … to competitors?

            … to authority (police, IRS, politicians, attorneys, doctors, etc.)?

            What do most people consider their most likable trait?

            What do most people consider their biggest flaw?

            Any secret attractions/crushes?

            In romantic relationships, is their generally monogamous or uncommitted? (If the latter, is their honest w/ partners?)

            Is their sexual behavior inhibited, average, experimental, or reckless? Has this changed (and if so, why)?

            Whom does their dislike most, and why?

            Whom does their like most, and why?

            Who’s the most important person in their life right now, and why?

            Whom does they secretly admire (nonromantic), and why?

            Who was their biggest influence, and why?

            Person they most misunderstands or misjudges:

            Person who most misunderstands or misjudges them:

            Have they lost touch with anyone significant in their life? If so, why?

            Worst end of a relationship (could be friend, romance, colleague…)?

            Whom do they most rely on for practical advice?

            Whom do they most rely on for emotional support?

            Whom, if anyone, do they support (e.g. advice or emotional support)?

 

MENTAL ATTITUDE/PERSONAL BELIEFS:

            Any psychological issues:

            Are they an optimist or pessimist:

            Personality (Color Code):

            They’re most comfortable when … (alone, hanging w/friends, drinking, etc.):

            They’re most uncomfortable when … (in a crowd, alone, speaking in public, etc.):

            They’re cautious, brave, or reckless in their approach to life?

            What do they most value/prioritize (family, money, success, religion, etc.)?

            Whom do they really love best?

            Whom or what would they be willing to die for?

            Are they generally compassionate or self-involved?

            Personal philosophy:

            What’s their most embarrassing moment?

            What’s their secret wish?

            What (or who) is their biggest fear?

            Any prejudices (race, culture, sexuality, religion, etc.)?

            Political party or beliefs, if any:

            Do they believe in fate or destiny? Are they superstitious?

            Character’s greatest strength:

            Other good characteristics: 

            Character’s greatest flaw:

            Other character flaws:

            What are their own favorite attributes (both physical and personal)?

            What about least favorite?

            Are these feelings accurate?

            How do they think others perceive them? (And is this accurate?)

            Biggest regret:

            Other regrets:

            Proudest accomplishment:

            Other accomplishments:

            Quirks:

            Character’s biggest secret(s)? Who else knows (if anyone)?

            How do they react to a crisis?

            What usually causes the problems in their life (romance, finances, friends, rivals, colleagues, personality flaws, health, etc.)?

            What would they most like to change about them self? Why?

            Write a paragraph (100 words) of the character describing them self:

            Short term goals:

            Long term goals:

            Do they plan to achieve these goals, or do they think they’re unrealistic?

            Will others be affected? If so, do they care?

            What if anything is stopping them from achieving these goals?

            What event or occurrence do they most dread or fear?

            What do they actively work to gain, keep or protect?

            Which person in their life would they most want to emulate?

            Which person in their life would they least want to emulate?

 

LIKES/FAVORITES:

            Food:

            Drink:

            Color:

            Book:

            Music/Song:

            Motto/Quotes:

            Film:

            Sport:

            Possession:

            TV Show:

            Hangout(s):

Writing Prompt #5: Would you like fries with that?

Written By: Jess - Apr• 23•14

fries(1)Today’s Prompt:

“Would you like fries with that?”

My 100 Words:

Eddie stared at the girl on the other side of the counter as her empty gaze scanned the menu.

“So, does the calorie count include the bun?” she asked, her voice accented with several ‘ums’ and ‘likes’.

Dear God above. What did I do to deserve this?

“Yes,” Eddie said.

His manager gave him a dirty look and he plastered on a smile for the blank face in front of him.

The girl frowned. “Do you have any other recommendations?”

Eddie ground his teeth. “A lobotomy?”

Another glare from the manager.

He smiled wider. “And would you like fries with that?”

Photo Credit: KEKO64,

Photo Credit: KEKO64

See What the Others Did!

Wendy Knight, Author: www.wendyknightauthor.blogspot.com

Kelly Martin, Author: www.kellymartinbooks.blogspot.com

Alison Woods (Peering Into. . .): http://alisonmillerwoods.wordpress.com/

R.K. Grow: http://www.rkgtheauthor.com/

Stephanie Worlton’s Kreating Krazy blog: http://stephanieworlton.blogspot.com/

Leah Sanders, inklings: http://inklings-leahsanders.blogspot.com/

Laura D. Bastian: http://www.lauradbastian.com/

Jaclyn Weist: http://jaclynweist.blogspot.com

Amryn Scott: www.wildscottkids.wordpress.com

K.R. Wilburn:  http://www.krwilburn.com/my-blog.html

Lindzee Armstrong/Lydia Winters: http://lindzeearmstrong.blogspot.com

Kat!e Larson: http://katesnovelidea.blogspot.com

Miranda Nelson: http://www.mirandadnelson.blogspot.com/

Angela Schroeder http://angelaschroederauthor.blogspot.com/

Grammar and Me

Written By: Jess - Apr• 21•14

Note: I was worried about not writing enough for this blog and then realized that it doesn’t have to be very long. This one is short and sweet. 🙂 

I suck at grammar. Always have. I didn’t get it in high school and in college I had completely given up because I still couldn’t get it.

Here’s a pretty good representation of how I felt whenever someone (teacher or friend) tried to explain it to me:

Granted, some of it has started to sink in slowly.

However, in the past year and a half I’ve started to care and have really tried to work on doing better with it. Turns out when you want to write a book and have it make sense you need to be somewhat decent at grammar. For the past year I’ve been buying grammar books and apps. I’ve also been making flashcards that I take everywhere (whether or not I’ve actually taken them out of my bag and memorized them yet is an entirely different matter). 

The good news is I have noticed that I’ve gotten better at it. So there’s hope for me after all!

Here’s all the books I have on it, plus some that go into how to revise (with one or two just ordered and on the way):

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What about you guys? What do you struggle with and are trying to improve with your own writing?

 

Writing Prompt #4: Today’s Horoscope: Your prized possession will end up in someone else’s hands

Written By: Jess - Apr• 16•14

prizedToday’s Prompt:

Today’s Horoscope: Your prized possession will end up in someone else’s hands.

My 100 Words:

Madeline shook from head to toe as she overturned another piece of furniture.

“It was just here,” she said between choking sobs.

The snot running down her throat made it more difficult to breathe as she tore the sheets from her bed, hoping the horoscope was wrong. The woman in the market had said her most prized possession would end up in someone else’s hands.

That would be near impossible since no one knew about her secret.

Frustrated, she spun around and saw a man in the doorway.

He held her lamp and smiled. “I’m ready for my three wishes.”

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Photo Credit to: Victor Habbick

See What the Others Did!

Wendy Knight, Author: www.wendyknightauthor.blogspot.com

Kelly Martin, Author: www.kellymartinbooks.blogspot.com

Alison Woods (Peering Into. . .): http://alisonmillerwoods.wordpress.com/

R.K. Grow: http://www.rkgtheauthor.com/

Stephanie Worlton’s Kreating Krazy blog: http://stephanieworlton.blogspot.com/

Leah Sanders, inklings: http://inklings-leahsanders.blogspot.com/

Laura D. Bastian: http://www.lauradbastian.com/

Jaclyn Weist: http://jaclynweist.blogspot.com

Amryn Scott: www.wildscottkids.wordpress.com

K.R. Wilburn:  http://www.krwilburn.com/my-blog.html

Lindzee Armstrong/Lydia Winters: http://lindzeearmstrong.blogspot.com

Kat!e Larson: http://katesnovelidea.blogspot.com

Miranda Nelson: http://www.mirandadnelson.blogspot.com/

Writing Prompt #3: That’s what happens when you follow your heart

Written By: Jess - Apr• 09•14

This one turned out a little weird, but as always I had fun writing it. 🙂

1980075_10152308818175915_1368622903_oToday’s Writing Prompt:

“That’s what happens when you follow your heart.”

 My 100 Words:

She squatted down behind the bushes, her leg extended and jittering in place. With a furrowed brow she watched the log.

Inch forward like a slug or lunge like a big cat? She gnawed on her lip as she watched the small white wings attached to the red body pump slowly in place.

Like a cat!

She sprung from the bushes, her feet beating the ground as she dived for the small thing.

“No!” she said as it fluttered out of her reach.

A boy sighed behind her.

He shook his head. “That’s what happens when you follow your heart.”

See What the Others Did:

Wendy Knight, Author: www.wendyknightauthor.blogspot.com

Kelly Martin, Author: www.kellymartinbooks.blogspot.com

Alison Woods (Peering Into. . .): http://alisonmillerwoods.wordpress.com/

R.K. Grow: http://www.rkgtheauthor.com/

Stephanie Worlton’s Kreating Krazy blog: http://stephanieworlton.blogspot.com/

Leah Sanders, inklings: http://inklings-leahsanders.blogspot.com/

Laura D. Bastian: http://www.lauradbastian.com/

Jaclyn Weist: http://jaclynweist.blogspot.com

Amryn Scott: www.wildscottkids.wordpress.com

K.R. Wilburn:  http://www.krwilburn.com/my-blog.html

Lindzee Armstrong/Lydia Winters: http://lindzeearmstrong.blogspot.com

Kat!e Larson: http://katesnovelidea.blogspot.com

Miranda Nelson: http://www.mirandadnelson.blogspot.com/

The Summer of Whedon

Written By: Jess - Apr• 07•14

Buffy and Firefly

A couple of summers ago I discovered “Buffy” on Netflix. Needless it was a good few months that year. I then went on a rampage and started watching everything by Joss Whedon and have been a huge fan ever since. This spring/summer I’ve decided to revisit both Buffy and Firefly for two reasons: awesome dialogue and great story telling.

After already attending a few conference I’ve started to hear other authors mentioning these shows, prompting me to revisit Joss Whedon’s work. I doubt I’ll watch everything, but I’ll at least revisit my two favorites and maybe the Avengers. I wish I liked the “Angel” spin-off more. I love David Boreanez, but unless he was all psychotic and without a soul he typically bored me to no end in that show. *waits for the outraged screaming of Angel fans everywhere*

So, this summer I’m going to try and watch an episode every day while taking notes/studying how they pulled off certain scenes and set up punchlines. If anyone wants to join me, feel free. 🙂

Planning Book 2

In other news I’ve been planning book #2! I took about a day to try and decide between jumping into a novella or working on my next big story idea. It didn’t take long to decide. Turns out there’s not a lot of resources on how to write a novella. I have the basics of it down, but I’m holding off. I think I’m going to read a few more this month and next before taking a stab at it.

So I’m moving on to the novel. I’m really surprised with how quickly I’ve progressed with planning out my new shiny book idea. I’ve worked a week on it so far and I already have a rough plot from beginning to end sketched out. Not only that, but it’s better organized than the one I just finished. I’ve been using Scrivener (best thing EVER btw) and messing with its features a little more.

I’ve heard the first book you write is the hardest and each one after that gets easier, but I never really understood that fully until now. I have a better idea of who needs full character sketches and who doesn’t this time around. I also know a few tricks for more tricky characters that don’t want to sit down and tell me about themselves. If I keep going at the pace I’ve set for laying the background/world building/character bios then I’m thinking I’ll be able to start writing it come the beginning or middle of next month (or worst case scenario in two).

Something else that’s rocked me back on my heels is how dark this new story wants to be.  I knew before I started really plotting it that it was going to be a great deal more violent than the last one, but I wasn’t expecting it to go as far as it’s wanting to go. And I haven’t even started writing it yet (other than one tiny little scene that I had to get out of my head). All I know is I’m excited to jump into it.

Writing Prompt #2: The Devil’s Name Was Fred

Written By: Jess - Apr• 02•14

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Today’s Writing Prompt:

The devil’s name was Fred.

My 100 Words:

The prim British man shuffled through the filing cabinet next to his desk. I blinked again at the gold name plate staring back me. It said ‘Fred’.

I cleared my throat and asked, “What happened to Lucifer?”

He shuffled through cabinet’s contents, not looking up. “What a mess,” he muttered, crinkling his nose. “No, no, no.”

I frowned and cleared my throat again.

“Ah, here’s your file,” he said. His gaze met mine and his triumphant smile wavered. “Did you say something?”

“I asked what happened to Lucifer.”

He waved dismissively at me. “Oh, I bought his share of Hell.”

 

See what the others did!

Wendy Knight, Author: www.wendyknightauthor.blogspot.com

Kelly Martin, Author: www.kellymartinbooks.blogspot.com

Alison Woods (Peering Into. . .): http://alisonmillerwoods.wordpress.com/

R.K. Grow: http://www.rkgtheauthor.com/

Stephanie Worlton’s Kreating Krazy blog: http://stephanieworlton.blogspot.com/

Leah Sanders, inklings: http://inklings-leahsanders.blogspot.com/

Laura D. Bastian: http://www.lauradbastian.com/

Jaclyn Weist: http://jaclynweist.blogspot.com

Amryn Scott: www.wildscottkids.wordpress.com

K.R. Wilburn:  http://www.krwilburn.com/my-blog.html

Lindzee Armstrong/Lydia Winters: http://lindzeearmstrong.blogspot.com

Kat!e Larson: http://katesnovelidea.blogspot.com

Miranda Nelson: http://www.mirandadnelson.blogspot.com/

First Draft and iWriteNetwork Retreat!

Written By: Jess - Mar• 31•14

(I apologize in advance for the GIF craziness in this post. But sometimes a GIF really is worth a thousand words. Now onto the important part:)

IT’S FINISHED!

For those of you who aren’t up to speed, I’m talking about my first draft of my novel. You ready? Here’s how it went down. 

The Retreat

I got to go to an awesome writing retreat put on by iWriteNetwork. If you ever get the chance to go to one, take it! I had so much fun making new friends and hearing about other writer’s projects.

The retreat was in Heber, Utah in a really cool lodge overlooking the mountains. I’m kicking myself for not taking pictures while there. It was a lot bigger than I thought it would be with a lot of nooks and crannies to write.

While there I also was given an awesome prize/gift for being the happiest camper. I can’t wait to put these to use!

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Almost everyday when I started writing (after forcing myself to stop checking Facebook and articles) I’d get into a grove. Early on it felt like:

But as the night went on it ended up feeling more like:

The first day I wrote a little more than my usual goal, but on Friday and Saturday I wrote considerably more. Here’s how the word count broke down:

Thursday: 1,364

Friday: 5,063

Saturday: 7,856

Total: 14,283!

I had no idea I could churn out that many words in a day! I definitely learned how far I could push myself during the retreat. They also fed us really well and what classes I attended were very well put together and informative. I didn’t go to too many simply because I knew I wanted to finish my manuscript by checkout Sunday morning.

And at 5:40 am (or there round about) on Sunday it happened! That’s right:

What did surprise me when I finished was how long it ended up being.

I’d thought, and planned on, my MS being around 85K. Yeah… that didn’t happen. Right now it’s a little over 105K.

I’m okay with that number. I know when all is said and done it might be longer or, more likely, shorter.

But when I finished I didn’t care how long it was. When I typed the last word of my MS I felt pretty dang happy. Tired, but happy.

I texted Jack after the last scene even though I knew he was asleep – I just couldn’t wait. But my favorite part was when I got home and excitedly told him the news again. It was a little like this:

So, now that it’s done, am I going to let anyone read the ugly mess of my first draft before I start fixing it?

I really, really want to start revising it. I already know somethings I need to change, but I’m letting it sit for a month before I start. It’s tough. Here’s my self-restraint right now:

Then I think about what going though those revisions are going to be like.

Overall, the retreat was so much fun and I’m very excited to have finished the first draft. And yes, this was my first novel. 🙂

 

(Side note: I started my novel on May 13th of last year. I don’t know the word counts per day/week/month of what I did before January, but here have been my last three months:

January: 20,560

February: 23,686

March: 32,109 – including the retreat )

“Wonhundred Wednesdays” Writing Promt #1

Written By: Jess - Mar• 26•14

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I’ve joined in with a bunch of other women over on the iWriteNetwork’s Facebook group to participate in a writing prompt every Wednesday. Yeah! I’m excited about this because it means that I’ll have to post something every week. The goal is to take the prompt and write a 100 word story around it. I can do that.

Today’s:

“You are on a crowded subway platform when you see a familiar face …”

My 100 words:

The light flickered above Kiley in the dark, grimy tunnel as another train passed by that wasn’t hers. She sighed and stood on her toes in hopes of seeing another one coming. Instead she saw a familiar face watching her. She spun around and tried to push through the crowd, but no one budged.

“I’m so sorry,” a voice said behind her.

A scream caught in her throat as she faced him again.

He stared at the long jagged scar along her jaw. “I’m so sorry I did that to you,” he whispered before slipping back into the faceless mass.

 

The Other “WonHundered Word Wednesday” Writers:

Wendy Knight, Author: www.wendyknightauthor.blogspot.com

Kelly Martin, Author: www.kellymartinbooks.blogspot.com

Alison Woods (Peering Into. . .): http://alisonmillerwoods.wordpress.com/

R.K. Grow: http://www.rkgtheauthor.com/

Stephanie Worlton’s Kreating Krazy blog: http://stephanieworlton.blogspot.com/

Leah Sanders, inklings: http://inklings-leahsanders.blogspot.com/

Laura D. Bastian: http://www.lauradbastian.com/

Jaclyn Weist: http://jaclynweist.blogspot.com

Amryn Scott: www.wildscottkids.wordpress.com